I feel like this version of my script it much more clear and easier to follow.
Writer duet offers a feature in which the script is read through by a computerised voice. I found this feature really helpful as I was able to understand how the script would sound out loud. I then uploaded this file into the animated storyboard I created earlier, and substituted the music already in the Final Cut project with the read through sound file.
I then ensured that everything matched up and inserted transitions to make my film look as realistic as possible. I also added preliminary titles at the start and credits at the end, to gage how long my film will be. Through doing this, the running time is around four minutes. My short film needs to be closer to five minutes, but I am not worried about this minute as I will be able to include cut aways and really retailed shots to ensure that my film is the required timing.
I found this activity really helpful and I now have a clear understanding as to how my script will play out on screen.
Here is the first version of my script. I feel quite pleased with it but I know that there is still room for improvement. I will show it to a few of my peers and family to gage where it’s faults are.
I first asked Maddy:
She said that she liked the bits in brackets before most of the dialogue because it makes it clear to the actors and readers how exactly the line should be said. She suggested that the different scenes should be more clear as the passage of time isn’t that obvious, and maybe that the wife should have been buried longer than just a few days before the film is set. Maddy also mentioned that there might be a little too much dialogue considering I am filming outside, so I will take this into consideration and maybe practice recording sound outside to understand what the struggles might be.
I then asked Vicky:
Vicky told me that there ought to be a little more dialogue between the man and woman when arguing, as it seems like a big over reaction for him to kill her after only seeing a few lines of dialogue. She said that I could make the panic scenes more clear by describing what exactly happens to Andy, rather than just ‘he panics’.
Finally, I asked Megan:
Megan said that I should name the shot types of all the scene descriptors so that everybody is clear about what is being filmed. She also stated that she thought some of the ‘cut to’ and ‘dissolve to’ transitions were a bit randomly placed and not always consistent, making it a little difficult to follow at times. This can be easily be rectified by re reading the script and just making alterations where possible.
Through getting feedback on my script, I now have a clear idea of how to make my script more easy to understand. I will re read my script and check that all of the different scenes are clear and do not overlap so that my script will correspond with my storyboards and prop list better. I will practice recording sound outside to get an idea of how difficult it might be and then I will change the dialogue on my script accordingly. I will include a sound bridge from the over the shoulder shot looking at the finger, to the scene where the couple are arguing to make it seem like they have been arguing for a longer period of time. I will ask people to read the script aloud for me so I can get an impression as to whether the final scene is long enough or not, and I will then make alterations. I will clearly describe how Andy behaves when he goes into states of panic so that it is clear to everyone involved in the creation of my short film. I will go over my script and add more shot types where possible, as a reminder to me and the actors what to film, with the aid of my storyboards.
Hopefully, with this help in mind I will be able to create a much more clear and detailed script which will be a great help on the day I film.
The title page button on Writer Duet allowed me to easily create a professional looking front page, just following the layout already provided. I removed the address, email and phone number section as I don’t intend on sending my script to people for advice without my presence. If I do chose to do this, I will print off a new title page with my details on.
This is page one, I haven’t made any changes to it yet because I’m waiting for feedback from my peers. Once I have heard what works and does not work, I will make the changes to my script so that my film script is as clear and interesting as possible.
I added an over the shoulder shot type to my script rather than including it in the action, to make it clear to the reader what kind of shot this is to avoid any confusion.
In this page, I added some lines from the woman walking her dog, to enforce how friendly the main character appears to be towards the people from the allotment, thus creating a greater contrast when he gets angry with people for touching his allotment.
I will now ask my peers and family of different ages to read through my script, to understand whether or not they would be interested in watching this film and how I can improve it.
I have decided to use a script writing website in order to produce my script so that it looks more professional than it would if I produced it on Microsoft word. I have chosen to use Writer Duet as I am familiar with the layout and how to use it as my group last year used it to create the script for our coursework. It’s benefits are that a lot of the generic features of a script can be easily achieved by just pressing the buttons at the top. So if I wanted the dialogue to look as it does in the other two scripts I researched, I would simply press the character button which would place the name in the centre and capitalise it, and then press enter and the dialogue section will highlight so I can easily write in the speech.
In order to present how realistic the scripts written in writer duet are, I quickly typed out the first page of The Silence of the Lambs script that I researched:
As you can see, both scripts look very similar and that through using Writer Duet I can be sure that my script will be set out as a typical script is, and that it includes everything that it ought to.
In order to create a professional looking and well structured script, I will need to research what the scripts of already published films look like. Through doing this, I will be able to create a similar script, ensuring that it contains all of the necessary elements.
I typed into Google ‘how to type a script’. This was the first result that stood out:
I found this really helpful as the annotation allowed me to see the reasons for featuring each aspect, and to understand what is generically included in film scripts. It also enabled me to realise that certain things are included which I wouldn’t have expected to see, such as transitions and scene headings, as I thought the script was simply so that the actors know what to do and say, but it now seems that it is a basic guideline for anyone involved in the production of the film.
I then looked at another, more famous film script to see if the style varied or not. I looked at the script for Silence of The Lambs, as it is a thriller film and I thought it would be useful to look at scripts from the same genre as the film I will produce in case there is an underlying feature that is included in all thriller scripts. I then annotated this script myself with similar annotations from the example I found.
From this, it is clear that the features identified can be found in multiple scripts, and by including these in my own film script I will be able to create a professional film script.